Couple of quick translation suggestions:
p. 54, second panel down on the left: I have seen you use this translation, "Hi hi!" a few times in the series but only now looked at the original. The original this time is "うふっ”, which is basically the sound they use in anime for sophisticated female characters to giggle/half laugh. I dunno if this has been consistently your translation for giggling sounds? Maybe you are thinking of "Hee hee!" which is an English "giggle" sound but more mischievous, less "regal." IMO a literal transliteration is best for this sound, there isn't a directly analoguous English word or sound.
p.55 - The lower left panel, what Mahiro says "~言うこときくから” the meaning here of きく is more like "comply with" than "listen to." So maybe "I'll comply with anything you say, ..."
Just my two cents. Thanks for your continued heroic efforts on this wonderful series!
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