If it wasn't riding on Still Sick's coattails, I don't think anyone would have paid this any attention, and justifiably so. Akashi seems like they can come up with interesting setups, but struggles in the execution. Perhaps I'm in the minority, but I remember thinking Still Sick fell off in the latter third or so too.
I'm actually glad they didn't end up together, but mostly because their relationship felt so vacuous. I actually had to go back and reread it to be sure I wasn't judging too harshly based on the back half, but there's just no spark whatsoever, romantic or platonic. I found myself relating far more to the characters observing their relationship from the outside, because even though I was privy to details of the relationship they weren't, it still felt creepy/weird/awkward/cringey for this adult to be hanging around with a child and inserting herself into her family life out of nowhere. The narrative just kinda mushed them together, and then all of a sudden they're codependent. That isn't to say that's inherently a bad plot device, sometimes people form unhealthy attachments with relative strangers and it could make for an interesting story to see that play out for better or worse, especially with the age difference. But instead they're both just generically decent, uninteresting people, and their problems all work out because they're so decent and uninteresting. Keep in mind, the first chapter of this story portrayed both of them as Actively Suicidal, and then it's either forgotten or handwaved away by the next chapter. And what a dumb, ultimately meaningless twist chapter 2 turned out to be - but I have to stop, this story really doesn't deserve any more of my time.
I maintain that a good editor could fix a lot of these issues, but the same could be said for most authors. In the end, it's a rare thing to be a good artist and a rare thing to be a good author. To be both is approaching the divine, especially on a deadline.
Thank you SAD, even if I found the story itself disappointing, your work is always impeccable
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