Suddenly licking a stranger's neck... she has got a lot of selfcontrol and is a really normal person .__.

She wasn't a stranger.

She licked her before ever talking to her, so yes. (Later she licked her when she was in bed but I meant the first time).

GRRRRRRRAAAGH, THAT ENDING

Nezchan posted:

Suddenly licking a stranger's neck... she has got a lot of selfcontrol and is a really normal person .__.

She wasn't a stranger.

Personally I thought the main character was the stranger of the two, lol.

Huh. That was depressing, I feel bad for the MC (Saki as well, but the MC more so for living in such a restricted life).

Licking a random hot-looking stranger's sweat is a good way to get to know them, kiddos.

I'll try that out and let you know how it goes. :)

'let me wipe your sweat off for you

lick

wait damn it no, thats wrong - '

'let me wipe your sweat off for you

lick

wait damn it no, thats wrong - '

Haha that was so funny xD But doesn't everyone have this -Oh-Shit!-Thus-Wasn't-What-I-Wanted-To-Do-But-Now-I-Did-Moment???

I remember in elementary school, that i ACCIDENTALLY kissed a girl on the cheek, but i wanted to whisper something to her! The awkward silence and the weird look she gave me afterwards, wasn't really worth it :c
To think that she was my best friend...ugh.
And funny thing, i saw her again some weeks ago, 'cuz our schools aren't really that away from each other, and AFTER ALL THESE YEARS,(6 years) THE FIRST THING SHE SAID TO ME:

"U lesbian?"

Facepaaaaaalm.

:(

Life's hard.

Old school yuri.

Okay so you love her yea? Lets just sit on yer ass and cry some more that would definitely change the situation for the better г_г
Nice work though it has a really stupid ending

OK I'm annoyed too, but I also understand that Japanese school girls going out as kids/teens is considered normal. Not to mention these sheltered upper-class girls might not understand a lot of things. I mean MC does only really start to realize what love truly is after getting shoved down and bitten. I mean she's never been in a relationship before and the girls talk about marriage interviews - so it's likely they've never even considered choosing a relationship themselves and/or love.

I think it's really shitty but those making out MC to purely a heartless bitch aren't considering a lot of the situation.

Umm. Yeah. This is pretty much what I was going to say. Ok. Not nearly as well though.
MC is young and has a big arse flaw. We see her facing it just as the story comes to an end. Probably to never be continued since the author has mad his/her point. They could meet up again later in life. We just don't know if she will break away from these traditions or what ever you call them that have her parents picking her husband.

Biting? Or would that be too much of a spoiler?

Also, gwennie-chan, great analysis. It made me appreciate this a bit more even though I still think the premise was just too weird (licking somebody's sweat out of nowhere and just cuddling up to a them afterwards, even though MC seemed to not be very fond of her/jealous in the first place...?) and the structure was "meh" as well.
Let's see if this gets a sequel, guess that'll be the time to judge it for what it is. But on its own this just makes me wonder what I just read...

LOL what the fuck xD
I couldn't take this seriously, especially when the sweat-licking kept recurring

Why did the end seem to tragic?
Gurl, she LITERALLY just left.
LIKE.
5 SECONDS AGO.
RUN????

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Oh wow....I hope this has a part two, even a part three maybe ^_^
I thought it was really good.

Also, gwennie-chan, great analysis. It made me appreciate this a bit more even though I still think the premise was just too weird

I'm glad my insights made the story a little better for you.

Wow it was pretty good. I liked MC a lot. It honestly wasn't really angsty. More like good drama.

This had a really classic feel to it, esp. when MC had her hair in those braids. Love.

Glad that this had the Aaaaangst tag or I might have accidentally read it. Sounds like I dodged a bullet.

Don't understand why some people like reading tragedies. There's enough tragedy in Real Life, why go to fiction to wallow in even more of it?

Don't understand why some people like reading tragedies. There's enough tragedy in Real Life, why go to fiction to wallow in even more of it?

Masochism. Catharsis.

Don't understand why some people like reading tragedies. There's enough tragedy in Real Life, why go to fiction to wallow in even more of it?

Same reason you read anything, because it's interesting.

Thor:
Glad that this had the Aaaaangst tag or I might have accidentally read it. Sounds like I dodged a bullet.

Don't understand why some people like reading tragedies. There's enough tragedy in Real Life, why go to fiction to wallow in even more of it?

Here's another list of works to avoid you might find useful.

Congrats on your release, none! :) (and bravo to the other contributors as well)

Thanks, OP. Wouldn't be possible without your tutoring either =D

OrangePekoe posted:

Congrats on your release, none! :) (and bravo to the other contributors as well)

Yup, he did a great job on it <3

"I meant to wipe the sweat off her neck but I licked it instead," is about as realistic as, "I tripped and my dick fell in her vagina."

SeifukuGirls posted:

"I meant to wipe the sweat off her neck but I licked it instead," is about as realistic as, "I tripped and my dick fell in her vagina."

Well she did wipe it off. Just with her tongue.