Meh...

I hope they remembered to lock the door....

Well, I had a feeling that I wouldn't like this based on the tags, the title, and even the first page, and, what do you know, I was right. I'm kind of considering changing my "Read everything remotely yuri that shows up on Dynasty Reader" rule now...

last edited at Oct 4, 2016 9:25PM

im a bit of a stickler n find it hard to read things with what i percieve to be Wonky art styles and this one's hella wonky. the proportions just seem off in every panel yknow? also wasnt a fan of the 'plot' but thats just my onion

Pretty hot. I like the art a lot.

Well... It served its only purpose, being hot, other than that its the trash that I knew it would be xD good trash maybe?

The art has a lot of amateurish faults: anatomy is pretty helter-skelter, weak - but somewhat stable - perspective work, paneling and composition is underdeveloped. The writing is trashy as all hell, but the protagonist develops to at least some degree and there's the semblance of a plot.

Overall it's not great, but it's not terrible. It definitely reads as a a first or early attempt at a yuri hentai manga, and it's good enough that I'd be interested in seeing how much the artist can improve with practice.

last edited at Oct 4, 2016 11:19PM

Meh, wasn't feelin this... shrug it just wasn't sexy I guess...
Doesn't it need a "gay for pay" tag?

Noooo... not the long nails... just seeing them in that place hurts.

Also, the money at the end was a completely unnecessary addition.

last edited at Oct 5, 2016 1:46AM

Amateurish art aside, this was a pretty good read. The artist definitely shows promise.

Hopefully they will continue doing small stories like this and improve little a little.

Meh, wasn't feelin this... shrug it just wasn't sexy I guess...
Doesn't it need a "gay for pay" tag?

Also, the money at the end was a completely unnecessary addition.

the money is there because mikako "cant tolerate anything improper." she pays them because she feels bad receiving something without giving them something back in return. if you notice, kyouka and hirai (the two gyarus) stop calling her Class Prez and start saying Mikako at the end so the three of them are a lot closer now than at the beginning. so i guess the money might be unnecessary, but it makes sense and it definitely isnt gay for pay.

last edited at Oct 5, 2016 3:04AM

Well to be good artist you've got to start somewhere, it's good that the artist at least tried.

horrible art style
1/10

Yuri Guy posted:

Meh, wasn't feelin this... shrug it just wasn't sexy I guess...
Doesn't it need a "gay for pay" tag?

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Also, the money at the end was a completely unnecessary addition.

the money is there because mikako "cant tolerate anything improper."

I understood it more like because she can't tolerate anything improper, she is weak to doing lewd stuff as it is something "improper" hence she can't resist wanting to experience it again, even if she has to pay for it. Especially since she mentions how she is "unable to break from this spell".

last edited at Oct 5, 2016 9:43AM

i can only image how much all (us) readers had their spirit crashed by the money at the end...
probably the artist thought an ending different from this was too conformist,

Meh, wasn't feelin this... shrug it just wasn't sexy I guess...
Doesn't it need a "gay for pay" tag?

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Also, the money at the end was a completely unnecessary addition.

the money is there because mikako "cant tolerate anything improper." she pays them because she feels bad receiving something without giving them something back in return. if you notice, kyouka and hirai (the two gyarus) stop calling her Class Prez and start saying Mikako at the end so the three of them are a lot closer now than at the beginning. so i guess the money might be unnecessary, but it makes sense and it definitely isnt gay for pay.

Right, but (as far as I could research) prostitution is illegal in Japan, and carries the same cultural connotations of immorality as in the west. So paying for the sex actually makes things even more wrong.

If she's supposed to be super uptight and traditionalist, I would've expected she'd try something silly like marrying them - which would've opened the door to some very amusing reactions and even some role reversal.

Edit: Or if the author wants to run with the underlying theme of corruption, then the money thing actually fits in perfectly. It'd require some kind of sequel or epilogue to tie the theme together, though.

last edited at Oct 5, 2016 12:10PM

I started reading this, and almost immediately got the same vibe that I get from lesbian porn aimed at straight dudes. Like, this wouldn't be out of place on a Brazzers or Evil Angel vid.

last edited at Oct 5, 2016 12:17PM

I doubt the author really thought more than 5 minutes or so about the money aspect, like most of the plot it seems to have been thrown in on a whim. The whole thing reads like a bad first draft (but I repeat myself).

In a weird way it's appropriate. The art has a deviantArt quality about it, where the artist learned by copying copies of copies, and has never really looked at a human very closely. So too does the story resemble a fifth-generation photocopy of "lesbian" porn full of straight actresses and marketed to an audience of straight dudes without any real examination of how real people interact. At least it's consistent.

I started reading this, and almost immediately got the same vibe that I get from lesbian porn aimed at straight dudes. Like, this wouldn't be out of place on a Brazzers or Evil Angel vid.

Well, speaking as part of the target market, I didn't like it much but mostly because of the writing. Ya, the art was amateurish, but doing good art is hard. I myself am absolutely horrible at it. I've read so many webcomics starting from early in the run and noticed how the art would develop from fairly crap to pretty damn good over the course of a few years . . . I can forgive bad art. And the basic situation I find sexy. But the writing was so perfunctory that I could feel my . . . interest . . . in the straitlaced young would-be disciplinarian getting tables turned by the sexy gyaru just draining away.

the art is seriously all over the place but does show promise and the story was really generic but not the worst I've ever read

The money made me lol tbh, I think she gave them both a note of 1000 yen? Isn't that very little, when "buying" sex? Probably

The money made me lol tbh, I think she gave them both a note of 1000 yen? Isn't that very little, when "buying" sex? Probably

It´s just an excuse

Heh......wow, this is being read into pretty deeply for a 20-something page hentai :D But that's fine :)

I'll just say, when I look at one (hentai) with the thought of trying to get it translated......well, it's not like I can read it, I only look at themes/the sex, and yeah, two "bad girls" cornering the straight laced class prez for some (slightly) forced lesbian sex.......yup, super hot themes, don't care about the art (short of stick figures I guess :D )

So yeah, I thought it turned out good, and cute as well when it was obvious they'd become at least somewhat close at the end.

And yeah, I personally expect the author thought out the money part at the end at least as, if not more so, thoroughly as the rest of the story. As has already been said, that was just Mikako's compromise that her friends were playing along with......she's still caught up in being straight laced and all, but she reaaaallly likes having sex with her new gal buddies :D

last edited at Oct 6, 2016 1:24PM

Oh god no not the long nails.

0/10