I don't know why but this latest chapter look a bit same with 50shades of grey (if u ppls know this movie lol)

I made it through 30 mins of that movie and had to walk out, it made me feel gross and violated , ICK!

"Ehhhhh contract? " XD

It is not 50 Shades of Grey, people miss the obvious. She was never in a real relationship, never even kissed somebody. She wants the contract because it is the only way she knows to engage in a relationship.

oh geez, writing and pacing is atrocious...
thought it would've gotten a bit better as it goes... but it did not..

oh geez, writing and pacing is atrocious...
thought it would've gotten a bit better as it goes... but it did not..

4 chapters is hardly enough to pass judgement.

At first I really disliked this series but now strangely I like it .... a lot.

It is not 50 Shades of Grey, people miss the obvious. She was never in a real relationship, never even kissed somebody. She wants the contract because it is the only way she knows to engage in a relationship.

...You know that was literally a thing in Fifty Shades, right? Grey was so fucked up and distant that he was never able to love anyone and his weird obsession with rules was because he couldn't trust other people, but he could trust a contract? It's very much the same thing, at this point.

And, really, as much as it makes sense from a character construction point of view, it doesn't make either of them especially sympathetic.

"I don't want to kiss someone I don't love. has sex with people for money I've never really fallen for anybody, I guess. decides to proposition waitress less than four seconds after seeing her Just haven't been with anyone long enough to care for them. cuts ties with woman who appreciates her personality and wants to see more of her It's not like I don't think about it, it's just never felt right, you know? implicitly threatens younger woman both physically and financially People only ever seem to look at me one way, like I'm supposed to be their boss 24/7, and it just gets tiring. orders random underling to get her coffee, fires another for collapsing from exhaustion Oh well. Que sera."

oh geez, writing and pacing is atrocious...
thought it would've gotten a bit better as it goes... but it did not..

4 chapters is hardly enough to pass judgement.

Can be enough. I agree, this is really a disappointment. Every couple of pages at least I get brought up short by that "Nobody would ever talk like this" feeling. The characterization is pretty terrible--even though everything's driven home with a sledgehammer, it feels like a good bit of the time the blows aren't even in the intended direction.
I also don't like the way the woman who's an S sexually turns out to be a massive bitch in day-to-day life, because it's a negative and unrealistic portrayal of SM, because it gives that stupid 50-shades vibe only bargain basement, and because it makes the main character totally unsympathetic.

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50 shades of the OL?

oh geez, writing and pacing is atrocious...
thought it would've gotten a bit better as it goes... but it did not..

4 chapters is hardly enough to pass judgement.

Can be enough. I agree, this is really a disappointment. Every couple of pages at least I get brought up short by that "Nobody would ever talk like this" feeling. The characterization is pretty terrible--even though everything's driven home with a sledgehammer, it feels like a good bit of the time the blows aren't even in the intended direction.
I also don't like the way the woman who's an S sexually turns out to be a massive bitch in day-to-day life, because it's a negative and unrealistic portrayal of SM, because it gives that stupid 50-shades vibe only bargain basement, and because it makes the main character totally unsympathetic.

Agreed. It's right out of 50 shades of Grey, so far. Just not done very well. Plot and character development are underwhelming.
The art is so so. I keep hoping that it will suddenly find its way to a better story. But I have serious doubts.

Even during the "normal life",she's still the Queen.I like that.
And screw realism,this comic is starting to get better in its own pitiful way.

I somehow seem to have missed the first three chapters of this but this is basically just the yuri version of 50 Shades of Grey? Gotta say...even if its a yuri version...anything resembling 50 Shades of Grey in any shape or form concerns me...Bright side is that it could not possibly be worse than 50 Shades even if it wanted to be.

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idk if this is rlly gonna show bdsm in a good light, considering the sexual assault prolly not tho. but tbh the only thing i've ever read that portrays bdsm well is sunstone (an american f/f comic)

I was always curious about how lame this would get but I think this Chapter 4 has dealt a finishing blow. I think I'll stop myself from reading anymore of this.

... this is getting more or more... awkward to read
It feels too forceful and borderline rapey
Maybe it'll get better I dunno, when the characters are more fleshed out and settled into the story

The last chapter also reminded me of 50 shades of Gray also. It's a good read but I have to agree w/ Faust on this one.

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The woman's attitude is just plainly terrible.. I'm gonna call her Ms. Grey, she doesn't even say "please" when ordering that coffee and lacks the elegancy Mr. Grey has, she doesn't deserve anything imo.

oh geez, writing and pacing is atrocious...
thought it would've gotten a bit better as it goes... but it did not..

4 chapters is hardly enough to pass judgement.

Yea, I'm having a hard time following the flow of logic or conversation or whatever story the author is telling. I'm so confused by the transition from one conversation to another. Also, the pictures aren't helping either. Doesn't flow. How does she get from point A to point C? From "you dont want me to do anything you dont like" to "Coffee" to "are you seeing anyone " to "lets be fake girlfriends"? I'm so confused??!!? By the way, the conversation about haven't yet kiss the girl, wtf is that about? Chapter 3 she kissed her 0.0? Does anyone get it? Care to explain please? Maybe I'm over thinking things but is the main character like super over paranoid/thinks she got game or something!??

oh geez, writing and pacing is atrocious...
thought it would've gotten a bit better as it goes... but it did not..

4 chapters is hardly enough to pass judgement.

Depending on the feeling from the chapters, it can. That last chapter was even more confusing on some point, like when the waitress girl comes in and says "you don't have to let me do anything you don't like". That came out of nowhere and sounds like something the OL should have said instead. Thought at first it was a mistake from the speech bubble, but the OL react to that. And "funnily" on top of that : "What the hell do you think of me ?" seriously ? I dunno, I'd say that she's some creepy woman that almost forces herself on girls she just met ? After those last chapter, her outraged reaction made me facepalm...

And she keeps going on "let's talk about us", like there's already something going. In the waitress girl's shoes, I'd have replied "there is no us, here's your jacket, now leave me alone". That she's kinda letting herself roped into such a situation, even after the OL just spouts some nonsense about "girlfriend for hire" without any proper explanation and pulling up some contract, acting like she already agreed to it ? Facepalming again.

So yeah, 4 chapters in and it doesn't not getting better, but, in my opinion, worse. :/

Most sincere BDSM couple dont do contracts, thats mostly a stereotype. ANd only mostly since some believe that the stereotype is real.

Wow. This girl gives the word "airhead" a whole new meaning.

I knew I wasnt the only one who immediately thought its 50 shades yuri manga xD ahaha

This is getting silly, but in a fun kind of way XD

Mmm, so 50 shades of gay? Boring...

hmm a yuri 50 shades of grey , I'll see how this plays out

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