A bit...disjointed
How I felt. It has solid potential I think, but a tough read.
Art isn't great, writing is sub par, character poses are awkward and look like they're being drawn from common reference photos. I saw the tags and was stoked, but it's a bit difficult to read. Looks like the artist needs some more experience.
I don't mind that so much, since the way to gain experience is to actually do the thing. Lots of artists start off awkward but improve as they go along.
The dialogue and narration are a bit of an issue though, not sure whether to lay that at the feet of the author being unclear, or the translation being too literal and not making the language more clear. Either way, it does come off as a bit difficult to follow on the first read.