Great story so far. Loving the complex emotions the keychain represents too. Probably the first story in a year or so on here that actually feels alive to me. And I love how there is an undercurrent of hope in the story. It's being suppressed by her darker thoughts, but I can feel it fighting back lol.
It's 5am right now, and I'm very tired, yet this chapter made me forget about that. I think it's going to get better; the use of symbolism is a great sign.
Writing, pacing, a limited selection of settings at the start of the story, and her developing background story is great too. I think all of that and the rest is coming nicely together in this one. Some classic/normal/old/whatever storytelling choices being used, and they look they will be used well. Can't wait for more.
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