Zefiberyl Translations
joined Apr 11, 2011
Hm, this was interesting. Generally I greatly dislike late-coming "revisions" to existing work, and so I was pretty biased against the new version of chapter 9, but as I compared the two, I really think it ended up much better for the extra additions.
One thing that I did prefer in the original though, is that Kase looks right at Yamada with a wide open and steady gaze as she reveals herself. It really gave me a sense that she was trying to be bold in advancing the intimacy of their relationship. To me that gaze is saying, "You are looking, right? Good. I want you to look."
In the new version, she does it with eyes averted. We soon learn why, and while self-consciousness may certainly make more sense for a teenager, it's very different from how I originally perceived Kase's mindset, and I think I preferred my own headcanon in that particular case.
Thanks as always for your hard work, Yuri Project.
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