3 pages in, and oof, we're really rushing through the exposition huh. A tip for aspiring writers: If your characters are telling each other things they should already be very familiar with solely for the purpose of informing the audience, scrap the scene and start over. Any info that the characters should already know should be removed from the scene and put somewhere else. You can do this through narration, through the action being shown, or by having them inform someone who is unfamiliar. Show-don't-tell is ideal, though.
That was alright, but the action scenes are incomprehensibly drawn. No idea how the car scene actually played out :P
I can't figure it out either.
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