This story would have been way better, with more story, less over the top sex. Something more along the lines of Mira's The Heir of the Curse. the Story would have been more enjoyable, if Wakana's feelings for Momiji, were not completely drug induced. as well. Also ditching the whole orgy thing would have been a massive improvement.
It would have been cool if Wakana was the one to get pregnant. Kenji could have been a minor character. He could have appeared at the beginning, treating Wakana like crap. Then at the end Wakana could reject him face to face, revealing her pregnancy. I see an image of Wakana, standing in front of Kenji, looking down, while she rubs her swollen belly. A small content smile on her face, as she tells the jerk goodbye.
I could have done without the exaggerated art work. I can't undrstand some artist need to draw girls with disproportionately large breasts. Do they think that's sexy? Because it just looks ridiculous, to me.
In short, I think Yamada Gogogo waisted a decent story premise, on crappily drawn, lazily written porn.
Edit: It was Nagashiro Rouge, that wrote The Heir of the Curse. Not Mira. My bad.
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