I Love this, Nawar Dagher, please keep making stuff. The art is incredible and really expressive. Literally no one is doing your charcoal pencil style, The depictions of anxiety, through the rambling internal dialogue and art are so raw and well executed that it makes the whole work shine. In those moments it reminds me a bit of Milk Inside a Bag of Milk, or maybe Mission-chan. honestly Id love more focus on the anxiety and introspection but i think an artist should go wherever their heart takes them.
There are a few awkwardnesses to the english, and i think the structural writing, as in like themes and plot are kinda flat at times. I feel like the interiority of some of our other characters here feels underbaked, what are they anxious about? Do we need more characters before we have even explored our first three? What are their goals? Largely it seems like each chapter is written independently of each other which can give it a stiltedness, where is the story going?
So rarely do you get this much soul from a yuri work but thats probably becuase most of what we read here on dynasty are works by professional mangaka with editors, rather than early, naive works that have yet to find themselves.
I’m writing this mostly for the author, knowing she reads the comments here. Thanks for posting this out here, great idea since piracy and free stuff is the only way art gets to the masses these days. And i somehow worry that, well if our main character’s authentically written anxiety is anything to go by, that our artist could be scared off by negativity, especially since there is a lot i feel is missing, i want her to know that she’s made something genuinely powerful at times and to keep at it.
Gosh i really gotta learn to draw and make my own yuri.
I love that yuri is so tied to the japanese school setting that the setting becomes mythic, almost required in yuri works, even if none of us experienced it, we lived its myth through our favorite genre and need to express ourselves through these tropes.
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