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joined Aug 16, 2014

Wut.

Is it over already? Lol

x2

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joined Dec 26, 2013

That was absolutely... abrupt. Would have been nice if it could have gone longer.

Edit: For those of you who are curious, I went to dig a little. So this is what the author said on their tumblr. Courtesy of google translate.

"2016.11.10  L Girls 3 (OKS Men's Comics) is 3 story postings (the final story) "Do not let it care much"! Thank you ^ ^

This is the final story. From the beginning I was thinking in a three-talk configuration and I was satisfied personally because it was all tightly contained"

Back read to the previous posts, re-reading the whole chapter, and seeing this. It is pretty much tightly contained. Hopefully, it could continue some way or another since L Girls ended.

last edited at May 10, 2017 3:00PM

Yuu
joined Mar 28, 2015

So we have a harem queen and a daily yuri fuckfest.

Sure, why not. A bit too hentai-ish for my taste though. It was rushed and a-romantic.

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joined Mar 26, 2014

XD
That's it? ...
Tch ... Girl never stood a chance.
So wait if she's getting the attention does that mean that they welcomed her into their world. Obviously yes but ya know. The way she smiled it could be up to our imagination I guess

joined Jan 22, 2017

At this point, I can tell how Comaku's never really been strong with story writing. Even the one about butts was pretty... ehhh, for how it tried to present conflict, and kinda resolved that relatively fast.

Regardless, still love the artwork, mainly the facial expressions which can really be cute :3

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joined Jun 12, 2015

Wasted potential. Again.

D.va_avatar
joined May 3, 2017

Ending is bit rushed but it is what it is and it ain't bad by no means.

Johanliebert
joined Dec 15, 2015

Lmao, I take this as a parody of harem in order to let some credit left to Comaku's story-writing ^.^
Amazing art as always, though.

Soralaylaff
joined Oct 16, 2013

Eh the 1st chapter was amazing, with the whole push and pull sexual tension, but everything after was just too rushed. It does make sense in the end that with how high her libido is, she would be perfectly content sharing in the harem, but sigh I wish it didn't skip over that realization with just a "several months later". A chapter inbetween with miss CEO experiencing being part of the harem before deciding she was okay with it would have paced it out better.

In the end, ch 3 was so rushed, it wasn't even a good hentai because it was way too short to fap to.

Pout2
joined Mar 7, 2017

awww man i was hoping for a juicy drama and the utter destruction of typical harem BS.

oh well, ending was still good.

Clipboard00
joined Oct 30, 2015

OMG, Comaku you did it.

This is PURE GOLD.

Sayaka_ava
joined Nov 23, 2014

Well that was just disappointingly abrupt, as a story or as straight up porn. Ah well, better luck next time? Art continues to be nice at least.

DarkLordofYuri
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joined Jul 6, 2016

What it's over!?! Aww :(

Still hot as hell though :D

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joined May 1, 2017

XDddDddddddd lol

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joined Jun 7, 2014

I didn't expect such an abrupt ending, good read though

joined Apr 27, 2017

Yay chapter 3! Comaku's stuff is too cute, I don't even mind the lack of nudity in them.

Edit: what, it's over? damn..

last edited at May 10, 2017 5:57PM

Purple Library Guy
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joined Mar 3, 2013

Depends how you look at it. It's not much of a story, but it's a pretty good joke. Final page is the punchline, page 14 is the setup, the whole rest of the 3 chapters is just setup for the setup.

last edited at May 10, 2017 6:39PM

joined Aug 11, 2014

Okay, what was going on with that toilet? Was that the author's best attempt at drawing a bidet's water spray? Because it looked like the lady just summoned a water elemental to masturbate with.

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joined Dec 10, 2014

I liked this a lot. I read the protagonist as sexual but aromantic and that's something you don't normally see in yuri stuff?

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joined Apr 28, 2016

Lots of sex, very little story.

I take exception to the assessment that Comaku is incapable of writing stories. Is My Hobby Weird? wasn't particularly deep storytelling, but the narrative structure was very much there and mostly coherent. I Want to Be Your Kind of Girl is also passable as a story, though it's less developed than the former. The bonus chapter of Hobby was similar to this: straight up porn with very little in the way of narrative. But at least that didn't have have any pretense.

Their (English translated) ouvre isn't large enough to make a definitive judgement, but Comaku seems to have issues with pacing in shorter formats. He or she doesn't know how to compose story development and erotica within a very small space, and in that situation foregoes the former for the sake of the latter. This series had the setup for a narrative arc, but jumped straight from the exposition to the resolution in the last chapter.

The sex was all there, and if that's all you wanted as a reader then you can walk away from this fairly satisfied. But if you were expecting a story - even a simple one - then it's lacking. I can't blame you if you're part of the latter group, as the series seemed to be building up exposition and conflict in the first two chapters, then abruptly ends everything in the third.

I liked this a lot. I read the protagonist as sexual but aromantic and that's something you don't normally see in yuri stuff?

This was the main redeeming quality for me. The main character was a relatively novel take on the harem protagonist role. She's actually very interesting: an aromantic, polyamorous, nonexclusive lead with a Buddhist underpinning that manages to pull off the "I choose every girl" route without making it skeevy.

On the other side, the series falls into the ruts of the genre when it fails to develop any of the other characters. The boss started out with some, and the second chapter made me think there'd be some development there. But by the end she's been homogenized into the harem as her only defining trait is her attraction to the protagonist.

last edited at May 11, 2017 6:15PM

This
joined Jan 17, 2017

It was a good ending for both sides I guess

DR2 Hajime Hinata
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joined Jul 20, 2016

Hmm so the harem route, huh?
Well I'm not really sure about what to think of the ending, but I guess it was mediocre

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joined Aug 24, 2016

don't you end there I NEED MORE

Img_8611
joined Sep 8, 2016

Gods be damned...

A bunch of girls with uncontrollable amounts libido, nice. XD

41tfud1d6wl
joined Jun 14, 2016

I like it. It's great, everyone is happy with no string attached. Nice!

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