it's so funny that this was just directly the ending she'd been looking to make lmao.
And like, I don't even dislike the ending it just doesn't really fit the rest of the story. So yeah, in a way I can totally see this was the ending Yatosaki Haru was set on from the start. She did not change it even though as the story evolved she probably should have. Regardless. I still liked it overall, I'm not letting a clunky ending drag things down.
Honestly, the ending could have worked fine as it is, the author just needs to work on pacing a little. Compressing everything from the truck to Lily sacrificing herself into one chapter completely obliterated the pacing and made both the sudden tragedy and ultimately happpy ending feel more confusing than anything else. If they had stretched that out over 2 or 3 chapters (plus maybe another chapter to let Mai angst a bit before revealing Lily was still alive), the ending would have felt far less abrupt, and there would have been more time for viewers to adapt to the changing tone of the story. It might have required them to tighten the story in other places, but the results would have been well worth it.
Ultimately, for a first attempt at creating a long-form story, this was pretty good, but there’s a lot of room for improvement.
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