pg 16, "I want you listen" -> "to listen"

pg 31, "...not matter" -> "...no matter"

Fun little bit of edge, but I feel like the plot got lost?

Its a pretty neat story. Ui and friends die in every single timeline outside of the game's story, but we don't get to see how Iroha reacts to that. This is just her going crazy and having a death wish because despite having access to a miracle, it can't actually give her what she wants.

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I want to see this story continue, it would be interesting to see how other magical girls would react to this version of Iroha.

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Ok, maybe something wrong. Nobody's perfect...

Isn't it relatively easy to wish Ui back alive and healthy? But maybe that's two wishes at once and beyond Iroha's potential. Still a cool take on her. One thing: I'm not quite sure how the universe post-Madokami works, but shouldn't witches no longer exist in every other non-MR world?

Damn this is depressing. The vibes feel much much much more like those the original MadoMagi anime than those of an average MadoMagi or MagiReco doujin.

Well, this is actually interesting, Iroha dealing with survivor's guilt after losing Ui, and meeting Yachiyo under different circumstances... it is a not unrealistic take on the story, though it is very different to my personal headcanon to Kamihama in non-MagiReco timelines.

I'm not quite sure how the universe post-Madokami works, but shouldn't witches no longer exist in every other non-MR world?

Only to the worlds that Madokami has already reached as she did not reach all possible worlds immediately, you could also interpretate this as happening at the same time as the original series, just a few cities over, plus I don't think that Madokami would change the story that much, Iroha would still have her survivor's guilt and death wish, she would just be seeking death by Wraith instead of death by Witch.

you could also interpretate this as happening at the same time as the original series, just a few cities over, plus I don't think that Madokami would change the story that much, Iroha would still have her survivor's guilt and death wish, she would just be seeking death by Wraith instead of death by Witch.

It happening at the same time as the original series makes sense to me, so I'll go with that. Wraiths instead of witches wouldn't change too much, but witches inherently are tied to meanings of greater despair. And if witches didn't exist, Iroha couldn't get her ultra twisted wish of being killed by Yachiyo's witch. I don't think she'd be satisfied with being killed by some random wraiths who all look the same and who ostensibly don't feel and never felt anything. I'm a little disturbed actually at how perfect Iroha's death wish is.

Hmm one thing I'm still confused about is how Iroha plans on being useful to Yachiyo. I'm not quite sure if it's by leading Yachiyo straight to witches after being witch-kissed or by giving Yachiyo a reason to fight and live. Given those two options, probably both with the latter being the deeper reason.

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I like the idea of this AU. Can't wait for the next part!

I don't think she'd be satisfied with being killed by some random wraiths who all look the same and who ostensibly don't feel and never felt anything.

Wraiths get a lot more fun than that though, on top of there being different types of increasingly powerful wraiths, they also feed on human emotion, memories and magical energy, which allow them to copy personal magia of megucas and even copy the image and behavior of people in those memories, if Iroha exposed herself to Wraiths long enough, it is likely one of them would take Ui's image, as an example, and in Iroha's current emotional state, being killed by Ui('s image) and being taken by the one who left her, may sound far too appealing, t'd be different in some aspects, but the core of the story would likely remain the same.

Frankly at this point I am thinking of just how many ways this set up can twist a knife on us, how long we meet Witches named Beatrice, Theresia or Yu Hong, for example...

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This was really good! Can't wait for the next one!

Wraiths get a lot more fun than that though, on top of there being different types of increasingly powerful wraiths, they also feed on human emotion, memories and magical energy, which allow them to copy personal magia of megucas and even copy the image and behavior of people in those memories, if Iroha exposed herself to Wraiths long enough, it is likely one of them would take Ui's image, as an example, and in Iroha's current emotional state, being killed by Ui('s image) and being taken by the one who left her, may sound far too appealing, t'd be different in some aspects, but the core of the story would likely remain the same.

I did not know that. The copying could be spectacularly brutal, as that one manga page seems to be setting up. Where is that from by the way? Not as familiar with Madoka series manga.

For the general wraiths, it's cool how they lose more and more human form the stronger they get. It's a neat design pattern.

Frankly at this point I am thinking of just how many ways this set up can twist a knife on us, how long we meet Witches named Beatrice, Theresia or Yu Hong, for example...

Yeah one thing MR has definitely expanded on from the original is making it clear that all witches used to be magical girls and what it feels like to kill something that used to be your friend.

Where is that from by the way? Not as familiar with Madoka series manga.

It's from the midquel Wraith Arc, set between OG series and Rebellion.

Oh, Iroha and Yachiko had a similar appearance of Madoka and Homura but since their relationship is more longers is more stable and healthy, ironically.

Well now I'm interested to see how this AU will go.

Iroha always struck me as a fragile person. Not during the events of the game necessarily, but before when she was a very lonely person. She didn't really have any friends, just people that she let lead her around due to how passive she was. It's only because she goes to Kamihama and meets the magical girls there during her quest to find Ui that she becomes stronger due to the bonds that she forms.

So take away Kamihama and the magical girls there. Then take away Ui the only person that Iroha would've been close to. She would have nothing to live for, forcing her to find something else, or end up like in this story.

TLDR: You don't have to be meguca to be suffering

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It seems the middle part was released during Comiket 97. Preview looks fun.

The first part has been updated, fixing some errors and updating the translation. See here for the original post

Sorry for repeating what 4-years-ago me said, but...

Man, this AU is depressing

Thanks for uploading it. 't was a great story.

Glorious, and I'm so glad that the scanlation is now finished too.

The nihilistic conclusion that all magical girls will inevitably become witches comes on a little strong when both the main series and MR go to lengths to explore all the ways that can be avoided, but if running with that scenario, then Iroha and Yachiyo are just making the most out of a bad situation. They both get to die in the manner of their choosing, while gaining some value out of their lives leading up to that death. Win win. :)

Thanks for uploading!

If she played the part well, you're supposed to clap as she exits!

Isn't it relatively easy to wish Ui back alive and healthy? But maybe that's two wishes at once and beyond Iroha's potential. Still a cool take on her. One thing: I'm not quite sure how the universe post-Madokami works, but shouldn't witches no longer exist in every other non-MR world?

The story is a great AU other than this part. Kazumi from the spin off series was able to make this almost same wish for her grandma in the hospital while in her death bed. Her exact wish was 'i want my grandma to live a healthily until her natural end'. Kyubey told her that she could extend her life, but she decided against it. The potential thing always confuses me a bit but kyubey never told girls that they couldn't wish for something

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