i feel like intercourse between them would be awkward as hell because they're both self conscious about everything lol just my thought lol good story though ^_^
I dunno if that's true. In the second chapter, Keiko can barely keep her hands off Emi, and is only stopped by circumstances. And in the third, Emi's all rarin' to go, to the point she's willing to just run off to the nearest hotel.
I think they're both frustrated enough by the end of the story that nothing's gonna stop them now (and, y'know, the story ends with them both naked for the first time anyway).
Alright, let’s begin. First of all, this is a really cute story. The characters were adorable and the romance was really nice and enjoyable to read. It was overall a sweet story and it’s hard not to enjoy it.
Now, here are some issues with the story. I liked the beginning, how she said she would develop feelings gradually, which is pretty realistic and interesting, but that was traded out for love at first sight, a trope I’m not a big fan of.
Also, while I like the characters, they felt flat. They didn’t extend far beyond their age. Simply put, it didn’t feel they had a personality. And man, did they not act their age. The “20” year old maiden may as well have been 14 with how she acted, and the “30” year old maiden went somewhere from 17 to 40 with how she acts.
I might be reading too much into it for a simple romance between two maidens, but I take my Yuri seriously. Also, the 20 year old felt too much like a Mary Sue, and tbh, you cknow joe stop reminding us of the age gap. We heard you the first 800 times. I know it’s the plot, but still, it’s repetative, and doesn’t go anywhere half the time.
Overall, pretty nice story for casual reading, but pretty lacking in depth and analyzed seriously, is pretty blah to meh. Since this is Dynasty though, I recommend it.
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While it's true the teacher admitted it was love at first sight when she first laid eyes on Emi, Keiko was the one who was SUPER surprised that Emi confessed to her. Keiko had to ease into her new role as Emi's love interest/date to respond accordingly. She explained/exposition to the readers it's just the way she handles romances. If she was asked out, she would say yes unless it feels off. The relationship would gradually develop over time. It never occurred to her that another woman would confess to her romantically. Love never entered into her brain. Whatever she saw as sparkling may just be a passing fancy, admiration for beauty, whatever it is. I can be making random assumptions and can't back any of them up.
The age insecurity I feel is very much justified. I think this may just be a very much cultural thing of the view/stigma of older women in their 30s. (Which I don't want to go into since I already write in paragraphs and I don't have the strongest understanding of Japanese society interpretation etc) Keiko is dating someone 10 years younger, so she may feel a bit insecure about her own body/image of how she may appear to her lover. She's dated people in her age group or older if we're going by assumptions, therefore not used to handle whatever younger partner's worries may have. So her insecurities and her mini fight with Emi feels pretty real. One's a working adult, the other's still a student trying to get her homework done in a timely manner. On your argument about the teacher's fluctuating emotional age of 17 to 40, love makes people do stupid/irrational things. Keiko was floundering around like a lovestruck idiot on new year's day when she was itching to bone Emi. She approached Emi to make up for the fight and offered very mature responses to Emi's concern about her male friends. She's not just going to drop all her male friends like that, that's just not how it should go. Cute girlfriend or no. Not sure what I can say about Emi being like a Mary Sue, so... shrug? The lead up to the conflict and the solution is believable, although it was resolved a bit too quickly and cleanly. But an adult should be capable of acting like Keiko so whatevs. If you really want to talk about flat characterization, you might as well look at Keiko's 2 housemates: "Love should make your heart race" or "love should make you wet." Although these 2 are more just exposition device rather than story mover.