I vote against tags which spoil. In this case it ruins a huge part of the emotional delivery of the story.

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Not a big fan of this one. Of the "she was dead all along!" stories I've read, this was the worst. It improved slightly on a second reading, with the "I'll go with you" line having some weight to it, but over all there's just not much there.

I vote against tags which spoil. In this case it ruins a huge part of the emotional delivery of the story.

Something I thought about too. I'll remove Tragedy for now, but mods can decide later whether to reinstate that.

We need the tag "Takejima Jin please fix this story or i will die in sadness" xDDD

Ohoho I forgot the feel of being surprised ;-•

https://dynasty-scans.com/chapters/a_song_about_missing_you#11

I totally missed what was happening there. I need some sleep. On second glance, it's nicely delivered with her disappearing as the light moves over Asuka.

But all in all I can't relate to the overall message of running away if you're dying. A dog or a cat might do that to find a place to die, but isn't it kind of your duty as a human being to bury your friends, companions and family or at least to be there to "bear witness"?

last edited at Dec 15, 2017 12:03PM

omg i absolutely did not see that coming

But all in all I can't relate to the overall message of running away if you're dying. A dog or a cat might do that to find a place to die, but isn't it kind of your duty as a human being to bury your friends, companions and family or at least to be there to "bear witness"?

It sucks, but I kind of get it. She probably had family/friends to help her with that process, but she didn't want wrap up her girlfriend into it because that's one hell of a commitment and a lot of emotional baggage. So she chose to let her go.

Who knows which is better, but she at least made a choice on the matter.

I knew it right away when she faded away. This is so heart-breaking ;_;

I vote against tags which spoil. In this case it ruins a huge part of the emotional delivery of the story.

Something I thought about too. I'll remove Tragedy for now, but mods can decide later whether to reinstate that.

Thanks, by the time I saw this it was removed and it made for a really nice emotional impact at the end. I found myself going back and re-reading pages looking for the hints Takemiya-sensei left, with strangely cathartic enjoyment.

last edited at Dec 15, 2017 12:25PM

https://dynasty-scans.com/chapters/a_song_about_missing_you#11

I totally missed what was happening there. I need some sleep. On second glance, it's nicely delivered with her disappearing as the light moves over Asuka.

But all in all I can't relate to the overall message of running away if you're dying. A dog or a cat might do that to find a place to die, but isn't it kind of your duty as a human being to bury your friends, companions and family or at least to be there to "bear witness"?

She wanted to spare her the grief of losing her to a slow, debilitating illness. Better, she thought, if she remembers me fondly, or even hates me and moves on now than if we stay together as I lose everything that makes us happy together.

FU-- uhhh fudge. Gonna admit I didn't see that being the actual reason for the breakup.

;__________; I'M NOT CRYING YOUR CRYING

I vote against tags which spoil. In this case it ruins a huge part of the emotional delivery of the story.

Something I thought about too. I'll remove Tragedy for now, but mods can decide later whether to reinstate that.

Good idea, I was about to say this needs a supernatural tag, but maybe not.

Why not enjoy these 3 years together?

I think it definitely needs a "Tragedy" tag, or "Drama", or even "Depressing as fuck".

I liked this. Especially when it is revealed she knew her girlfriend was dying for two whole years, but decided not to go and see her. I can not decide if it was the very pinnacle of consideration, or of stupidity. Either way, is a nice touch. Usually in these types of stories, the realisation comes far, far too late, I can not actually recall another story when the other party knows in advance.

well that messed me up...

I can not decide if it was the very pinnacle of consideration, or of stupidity.

I would call it selfishness.

God bless no why ugh damn it Takemiya, that hurt

I vote against tags which spoil. In this case it ruins a huge part of the emotional delivery of the story.

Something I thought about too. I'll remove Tragedy for now, but mods can decide later whether to reinstate that.

I was about to suggest the tag but if you look at it like that.. I agree it's better without.

I think Angst and/or Drama, and maybe even Supernatural would be appropriate, non-spoiler tags.

I would call it selfishness.

How so?

I think Angst and/or Drama, and maybe even Supernatural would be appropriate, non-spoiler tags.

Supernatural ? Nah..

Ghost ?