The story comes across as creepy because nothing has been done to "legitimize" Mimika's attraction to Yuzumori. Yuzumori doesn't show any signs of reciprocating Mimika's feelings. In fact, she seems supremely unaware that those feelings even exist, as a middle school child would be.
That brings me to the second point, Yuzumori is a surprisingly accurate portrayal of a young girl despite being the love interest in a lolicon story. A lot of readers will be able to relate her to young children they know in real life, which makes them much less reticent to put her in sexual or even romantic contexts.
Finally, most of the story focuses on Mimika and her attraction to a small child, rather than on the child herself. You get an unfiltered view into Mimika's fixations around Yuzumori's character, and due to the aforementioned lack of reciprocation and Yuzumori's authenticity of childishness, it comes across as very stalker-ish, borderline predatory behavior.
The best part: I think deep down, Mimika has always been aware of her feelings and of how inappropriate they are. There's a distinct sense of guilt that's present here that is conveniently left out of most lolicon stories. I get the feeling that she's not as dense as she let on earlier in the story, being willfully oblivious to the concept of love. She was simply doing mental gymnastics to avoid confronting her feelings. This is why she's taken aback when Shi-Chan rolls up, says "Fuck that noise," instantly spells out those feelings and shoves Mimika's face in it (which in turn is why Shi-Chan is awesome).
TL;DR Nabokov would be proud.
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