This one feels a bit disjointed, kinda hard to follow, especially at the cafe. Feels like it could have used 10-15 pages more to spread things out a bit. There's things in it I like, but still.

and now the artist only does yaoi, so thats that :(

last edited at Jun 3, 2016 1:14PM

The whole story had a huge hole in it . I couldn't follow anything because things needed more detail story wise . The art needed to be more defined as in who is actually who , there were no distinctions between characters .

wut

also who was the blonde waiter

Pitching in to agree that the story did feel quite disjointed. Like there were some parts I did like, like the cute awkwardness of the senpai (seriously, freckles are amazing) but the story did feel quite hard to follow.

Also I'm glad to see I'm not the only one lost, for once.

last edited at Jun 3, 2016 1:26PM

I'm guessing the waitress was a past fling / someone she fools around with occasionally ? Idk, the story had some nice points certainly, but it was very poorly constructed.

Well, I came to see if someone did understand, but it seem anyone did

what did i just read

I think the waitress was the girl she kissed at the start. Made some sense to me, just that the main character likes the character she went to the cafe with.

I think the waitress was the girl she kissed at the start. Made some sense to me, just that the main character likes the character she went to the cafe with.

You'd think so, except that would mean their hair colour, hair style, dress style, personality and sexuality had changed since page 2. Soooo who the heck was it.

last edited at Jun 3, 2016 1:56PM

I think the waitress was the girl she kissed at the start. Made some sense to me, just that the main character likes the character she went to the cafe with.

You'd think so, except that would mean their hair colour, hair style, dress style, personality and sexuality had changed since page 2. Soooo who the heck was it.

I think the first page and half of page 2 were in the past. Half way through page 2 we are a few(?) years into the present. So yeah I think they were the same girl.

Nah, strike that. It probably is a different girl. Page 13 may be a flash back at a different restaurant?

I dunno, I am confused too...

last edited at Jun 3, 2016 2:12PM

That was better than I expected...I liked it ^_^

She looks like Saitama lol.

Badly written. I liked MC though.

What a mess.

I'm glad that I'm not the only one who thinks the story's hard to follow. The art could use a little more polishing too. I can't figure out who is who.

im confused

Hey, did anyone else find this story confusing and hard to follow, or was it just me?

I have no idea what just happened

Ehhh not sure

I think it was sweet, but this must have a sequel cuz there are a bunch of holes in it.

Alrighty well... nearing the end she called that chick in the beginning, "Stupid Bitch!" Wondering if maybe she's straight and an asshole, or just her ex. Then now the main character wants to pursue an actual relationship and that chick's getting in the way?

Screw it, too confusing. ;_;

jesus what just happen

I'm still trying to figure out what happened after page 12 ... and it bothers me, cause it's been 20 minutes now and I keep staring at the screen >_>

Well.... after some re-readings, somehow I came to the following conclusion:

The "girl kiss" the beginning is the waitress. Apparently, that first kiss was a kind of "test" for his part, years ago, after which she concluded that she prefer the boys (or be with a girl was something that she couldn't face at that time) and left our MC lez-made but with no-girlfriend.

Our MC develop some kind of trauma: the girl she liked was "discovered" by someone else and was taken from her, so when she meets "the new girl" and feels somehow attracted to her, she can't help but remember the previous experience and think "Maybe if she is so simple, with such low self-esteem, nobody will discovers she" (AKA, nobody will take she from me).

Suddenly (and, in my opinion, without any reasonable justification to return to the history), our "first kiss girl" reappears (the waitress) and for some reason also unjustified and absolutely out of the blue, she kisses again our MC just before going home like nothing.

Since the black-haired girl has some feelings for our MC (as all we could perceive from minute one), this sudden kiss provokes to her a certain jealousy, which leads to our MC to, also, Pseudo-conffess herself...

Assuming reasonable this "conclusion", the attempt of argument doesn't seem bad to me, but the narrative leaves much to be desired. What a shame...

last edited at Jun 3, 2016 7:30PM