It was too short. The playful, carefree atmosphere felt charming and they should have further built on that.
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There should be a function of the reader for adjusting the size to fit the page horizontally.
I'm kinda glad it was so short, because if it'd continued, it woulda been the usual rivers of bodily fluids and "FEEL ME MORE!" and "DON'T LICK THERE IT'S DIRTY!" and yadda yadda yadda. As it was, it set a specific tone pretty much perfectly and then smartly decided not to ruin it.
I'm kinda glad it was so short, because if it'd continued, it woulda been the usual rivers of bodily fluids and "FEEL ME MORE!" and "DON'T LICK THERE IT'S DIRTY!" and yadda yadda yadda. As it was, it set a specific tone pretty much perfectly and then smartly decided not to ruin it.
This author doesn't seem to go for that stuff at all, so it's unlikely that would be the case.
I know the title is supposed to be abbreviated for cinderella girls and million live, where the characters are from, but I see it and every time I think CORNMEAL