Remade Directors Cut version of http://dynasty-scans.com/chapters/my_heart#1

Story's pacing is a bit all over the place, hard to figure out the flashbacks from the current things, but love that couple, so meh, enjoyed it all the same. Just wished it wasn't as confusing to read. :p

Thought I'd read it before. Still good though :) Got to say I don't totally get it though. If Alice returns her feelings why did she slap her when she confessed, and what exactly did Yukari have to do with it?

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Ok I read Nezchans take in the other thread - I guess that would make some sense but not totally. How did Alice know to look for Yukari, and why think she had done something? She thought Marisa returned her feelings from the start right? So why suspect something wierd?

But I do love cloud pallets art :)

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Feels much more understandable than the other version.

Always awesome to see more Cloud Palette, perfect way to start my day :D

Ok I read Nezchans take in the other thread - I guess that would make some sense but not totally. How did Alice know to look for Yukari, and why think she had done something? She thought Marisa returned her feelings from the start right? So why suspect something wierd?

I guess because it's Gensokyo. In a world of near constant incidents, it's natural to think that any sudden event is caused by someone or other messing with shit.

As to why Yukari, I guess because she kind of has that whole yokai mastermind shtick going on. Plus, if the confession happened on the some night as the party, then Alice might have thought of Yukari since she was kind of creeping on them earlier.

Those are my thoughts, anyways. I'm not sure I 100% buy that explanation myself.

A little off...not necessarily the pacing, the pacing's fine, but just the plot elements don't connect and seem kinda random at times.

I always love these two and Cloud Palette, but this one's a little head-scratching.

Remade Directors Cut version of http://dynasty-scans.com/chapters/my_heart#1

Well that explains a lot. I was wondering why it felt so familiar.

Also is it just me or does the leveling for this one seem really off?

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