I just read the revised story. And I have to say, seeing the proper dialog in it's intended context made it much clearer than just reading it in the comment section. I still am a tinsy bit confused about the MC sneaking into the boy's room. Were they living together, for some reason, or was she breaking into his house. What's the deal? If they were living together that's Okay... I guess? But a college girl breaking into a house, to sneak into an elementary schooler's room is mondo bizarro.
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