Apart from the questionable English, I noticed a contradiction. In Panel 3 on the first page, Aoi says she doesn't have any friends, but then introduces Hinata as her childhood friend on Page 2.

early Yuru-Camp but with perfect english and some in-tents fucking!

This is not inferior Yuru-Camp.
This is glorious Yama no Susume!

my bad. I honestly didn't know about this until I look up afterwards.

i was feeling kinda down but the Engrish got me in a good mood LMAO. thank you