Clearly needs a Glasses tag, tho.

Man, I loved this. You people claiming that it's boring confound and mystify me. I love the pacing. It feels very natural, and is light-years ahead of Bloom Into You, which is my gold standard for "a lot of art and dialogue and not a damned thing happens".

Finally got an account at AO3, so if anybody wants to read my Saejima x Ichiha doujin script, you can find it here:

Murmurs in the Background - Chapter 3: Switch

What the hell is a Hugo?

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hugo_Award

As a result of ballot-box stuffing by a group of misogynist ne'er-do-wells, one of Chuck Tingle's erotic works was a finalist for the 2016 Hugo Award.

But because Mr. Doctor Chuck Tingle is a true buckaroo, he promptly turned the tables on the bad guys.

Sounds like a title created by Hugo-Award Nominee Mr. Doctor Chuck Tingle.

At this point I've read so many weird manga's with crazy titles, that I actually thought it was manga.

Zuikaku Gets Turned On by Shoukaku in Diapers

Welp, I'm gonna keep working on it to see if I can help her improve the quality. Maybe not much I can do just being the guy with the money (and not a lot of it at that), but I'm gonna try.

Can you give me some idea of what could be done to improve it and make it more suitable for uploading? Is it just an overall quality issue?

Reminds me of my family reunion.

One of your family members confessed their love to you then made you stab them??

Possibly the other way around. The stabbing came first, followed by the deep confessions of love.

I got involved in BDSM 20 years ago with my ex-wife. We only did it for one year, because she didn't enjoy it as much as she thought she would. I liked it a lot, though, and I've maintained residual interest ever since. And I still feel tied (no pun intended) to that community.

And it always torques me whenever we're supposed to identify villains by their "deviant BDSM practices". Most of the people I know who practice BDSM are warm, loving, compassionate, and so on. They just show it in unusual ways.

So I wanted to see if I could rehabilitate these two and show them in a sympathetic light. I've got another commission in the works, a 6-koma comic featuring them. I've also written a doujin script featuring them, showing them as a non-scary BDSM couple like the folks I know. (Said script also does the same thing with Nukui Tomomi-san.)

Yep, I'm now officially a big ol' fanfic-writing dork. I am shipping the fuck out of these two.

Here's a picture I commissioned:

http://i.imgur.com/uQUP5xq.jpg

I submitted it as an upload request, but I kinda suspect the artwork isn't quite good enough to get uploaded here. I still wanted to share it, though. Hope that's okay.

Also: *you're on pages 3 and 5.

I think this should have the Author: 23 tag, because it doesn't show up with his other works.

Orphan tag? Has nothing at all associated with it.

Beats me! That's why I asked. :D

I am in the midst of writing a Saejima/Ichiha (from Valkyrie Drive) BDSM doujin that I hope to get illustrated, and hopefully it will be better written. Only time will tell.

Remember, second, third and fourth drafts are your friends.

By my count, I think I'm on Draft #17.

Well, careful not to *over*polish, too. It's easy to get caught up in tweaking minutae and spinning your wheels.

I hear ya. My current issue is that I have crafted Act I and Act III, and I am 98% happy with them. But Act II is proving to be elusive.

In the unlikely event that anybody cares, I have finished my script and would be interested in some beta testers. Dunno how I'd get it to you privately, though. I guess you can PM me over on Reddit under the same username if you want.

Implied Anal on Page 26

I like how the dark-skinned girl is apparently the one who proposed, even though the light-skinned girl is the dominant one in literally every other image of these two.

I assume that's the names of these two girls under the umbrella on the chalkboard. Anybody have a translation? (Or otherwise know the names of these two characters?)

"How succulent", I think. Not sure it's Spanish. Maybe a Spanish in-joke of some kind?

EDIT: *High Fives Faust*

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Time to apologize to my girlfriend for not hurting her.

I've had to do that before.

Regarding the doujin, I was confused by how big Shimakaze's boobs were. Normally they're a lot smaller.

This is my favorite kind of doujin: Romantic and lovey-dovey AND smoking hot.

I agree with the others that Nozomi's behavior is understandable. I have been that insecure before, especially when I was in my late teens and early 20s. She didn't commit some great crime. She was just being a doofus.

Wish this had a sequel hahahahaha

Forget the doujin, this thread needs a sequel!

this one hits all the right bottoms

Best tag ever.