If her sister DID find her stuff and start following her on Twitter, I bet this comic is revenge knowing her sister would see it.

DschingisKhan
Moscow

Bizarrely, this was exactly the dance I was imagining while reading. Please get out of my head.

last edited at Apr 3, 2017 3:24PM

Magic baby... Or... Boundary baby!

I was expecting this to be ridiculous, considering the author, but it was mostly introspective, sad, and heartwarming with a bit of weird at the end.

^ same. though the screw driver part...was a bit...

Quite literally, it was indeed a bit.

Maybe now I eat my words though. With chapter 7, that is.

Cliches4lyfe.
ClichesRlyfe.

last edited at Mar 29, 2017 9:52PM

When you switch out the yuri it kind of goes right back to blatant gender roles. Feels like the life is sucked out of the characters and they're reduced to their gender expectations. For me, it goes from cute to unnerving.

Lady Macbeth had this same issue. I'm pretty sure it worked out well for her.

Page 11, bottom right panel. Story of my life. Only weird smiles.

And now we've got a man killing his ex-lover on the news and a chain-smoking stalker in the hallway. Just what this story needed.

Nothing ratchets up the suspense quite like a gun! Or however that quote goes.

Point taken, criticisms withdrawn :D

Ack. Don't do that. The back should be rounded forward rather than back, granted it's not here. Check the form for a standard bar bell squat. You've described the form for a squat with no weight, but that's a completely improper squat for using a bar bell. The legs should be open so you can dip down and get your knees to a 90 degree angle. If your shoulders are back and your butt is out there's no pressure on your spine. You get more muscles involved with your arms apart. Check any video of a power lifter squatting or a form chart. Your way can work, but it won't give you a proper workout. But absolutely don't keep a straight spine, you'll fall over backwards if you can actually manage to squat low. I do these at least twice a week, so this isn't just theory.
Do you even lift, nee-san?

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Her form seems fine though. Squats are a full body lift. You have to bend that far forward to incorporate the upper body.

Nez, did you do a double take when you saw this thumbnail? I totally did. Gears it was not though.

So, wait, how did any of that happen? Okay, schemer girl saw the photo of them kissing and sent it to herself, got that part. That seems like something that would leave behind really obvious evidence if she sent it via the chat client, email, or anything else that's quick, but idk, maybe she bluetoothed it, who knows. But she also wrote an accurate and detailed article about their lives, too? Maybe they talked at length about their dates and home life through chat and email, but that still takes time to read through. Did she also send herself all of their chat logs as well? When?

The way it's presented, she starts arguing with the other idols almost immediately after being left with the phone, but even if a couple of minutes passed in that one frame, that still seems like barely enough time for her to do all the things she must have done, on top of having to do it in a way that leaves no traces or having to erase her footprints afterwards. And then she has the whole article written and posted seemingly by the next day? It all just seems like a bit of a stretch, not to mention how heavily reliant the entire plan is on Misaki being bizarrely casual with her dangerous personal information (after just getting into a scandal about it!) and incredibly distrustful of Nagisa and nobody else.

I'm definitely biased against bad endings, so maybe I'm being unfair and overly critical, but even judged on its own merits, I can't help but think this story is still just too sloppy? It's just not satisfying in any sense. It said it was the author's "brilliant one-shot debut", which... I guess is at least half true. It's definitely a debut. Not sure I'd describe it as "brilliant", though. In any sense of the word.

All those side notes the editors put on are overblown, so I suggest not to put any stock in em. Since Misaki left Ayane the phone to update the blog, my guess is this isn't the first time Misaki let her do that. And a few minutes is more than enough time to flip through the conversation log and have all she needed. Or even copy and paste a huge portion of the log and forward it. Even though Line is super encrypted, it's easy to wipe by just deleting a chat and it's really easy to forward messages.

Ah, and all the yuri on here requires a lot of suspension of disbelief to enjoy. Especially because romance genres, and yuri in particular, rely on really ridiculous miscommunications for suspense.

And hot damn, I love when some good, albeit dark, yuri comes in. Angst, drama, and romance, the real yuri combos. None of that empty shipping or pretend yuri subtext!

last edited at Mar 4, 2017 7:34PM

We all goin' to Touhou High.

Very true Nez, but I also hold this opinion. Really, just more Koa. But there also wasn't enough Shanghai when she transformed!

last edited at Mar 3, 2017 9:34PM

Nez, I'd die if that happened

Counterpoint:
The story was great, the characters were great, the art was fun and enjoyable, and the emotions ran high. Hell, the emotional interplay throughout was fantastic, engaging, and complex.

And that is what we come here for, isn't it? Coming here and reading Japanese fan fiction for story is like expecting (high) literature out of a Danielle Steele romance novel. Something about throwing stones in a house made of glass.

Oh man, camping season is revving up again.

Flan has the bear!

last edited at Feb 27, 2017 11:23PM

Dynasty's wish to keep my work here is a big part of it.

You... coerced Dynasty into taking down another group's work? It was their scripts for those later DMTs... right?

Oh man, who're they looking at?

last edited at Feb 6, 2017 1:22AM

elevown posted:

Even still I proffer the uniqueness and sound of 'Miss sunflower' - and have known her as that for for SO long - (like 7+ years?) it's hard to change at this point.

This is probably the biggest issue. If it had started out as Himawari-san then you wouldn't be hearing complaints. But changing it after so long is going to be jarring or even confusing and will feel quite arbitrary. It should've stayed as Miss Sunflower for consistency's sake.

Yeah, that's my issue too. It's been so long and is such a defining trait of her character. To me, it's wrapped up in who she is. It feels like the Miss Sunflower on the page doesn't match the one in my mind anymore is where the discontinuity is coming from is what I'm saying.

And that's why Homura did nothing wrong.

Is there a new translator? It seems odd to switch to 'Himawari san' now after 30 chapters of 'miss sunflower'.

Kawaii mentioned that after the last release: "Oh, before I forget, we decided to change Miss Sunflower’s name to Himawari-san from the next chapter onward. Using Miss Sunflower was decided by the first translator of this series and we kept it this way so far, but the group has changed greatly over the time, and we think that keeping the name more to the original fits better."

D:

Personally I think it was a bad choice. It's really jarring to suddenly change things after 30 chapters like that and Himawari-san just sounds so much more generic than Miss Sunflower which is really distinctive and feels very fitting for the story.

Seconded. Hurts a surprising amount for a series I've been following for so long. Really hard to read each time they say her name because I'm thinking "Miss Sunflower" every single time. And the, like, emotional weight is completely gone in the new name. Almost the feel of a new character. Bad feelings in the stomach while reading, is what I'm getting at. Not sure if everyone else had quite the visceral reaction.

But, well, books and bookworms and the slice of life aspect made the story personal. I feel like we lost a little bit of Miss Sunflower :(

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