This felt cheat-ish. As if we came in at the end of the story just in time for the happily ever after, without actually experiencing all of the drama and pain the characters went through to get there. Story is still good though.

Maybe the author just didn't want to focus on the pain. They used various context like the texts to quickly explain how crappy the husband is, and then the author was able to focus on the solution for the bigger part of this short story. So I don't think that's cheating, instead it's simply choosing what to focus the narrative on.

Plus based on the numerous manga we've seen on Dynasty with crappy husbands, I certainly don't mind sometimes skipping the 5-15 or so chapters of abuse.

^I feel like you're trying to insult moe, when Ningguang isn't even moe. Plus you're saying "weebs", when the main market for Genshin is it's origin country, China. Also while her model could be a tad more mature looking in game, I think she does look pretty mature within the game's art style, and for the most part appropriately looks like a 25 year old elegant beauty. Notably ALL the official character art is higher detail and more refined than the in game models. That's very common in gaming and nothing new, plus there's numerous good reasons for the models being lower in detail. Here's Ningguang's model and her official portrait. In that official portrait art she really does look like an elegant beautiful 25 year old to me, and I think that's how most people see her character. I think it's also why this fanart even exists.

last edited at Mar 25, 2021 1:58AM

This author is a complete sadist I swear.

if it's only has more pages............................
It'll be really good if oneshots become extinct

I don't think one-shots will ever become extinct, they're short comics people make usually either for fun or so they can sell them, often made on creator's own free time. There's also one-shot collections, they will sometimes center around a theme, sometimes focus around a singular author, or showcase numerous authors, there's many ways to do one-shot collections and reasons for them to exist.

It's a bit like how you can make a really good short film, animated or live action. A short story can easy encapsulate a few ideas and key points a creator wishes to convey. Short stories also enable people to create things without having to dedicate a ton of time and resources to the project, unlike a full series or feature film. A larger project requires more time, funding, and often more people to help with the project. We're also talking about Japan here, where Comiket is a massive, massive, deal. A place for people to sell their original and parody doujins, SFW/Questionable/NSFW, often one-shots, or sometimes 2-3 issues. Short comics are an incredibly popular medium in Japan.

I understand wanting one-shots to be longer, and hoping that they get serialized into a full series, but I think this author did a great job conveying the narrative that they wanted to within the length of this short story.

last edited at Mar 25, 2021 12:16AM

^In fairness Rin and Shirou have a likeable relationship in my opinion. For example their relationship in the Unlimited Blade Works series is dynamic, and how they bounce off each other is interesting. I'm not really sure what "that's how fate universe works" means here, as Shirou is either absent or not the focus of numerous entries in the franchise. This is also coming from someone that prefers the Rin and Artoria ship.

last edited at Mar 25, 2021 12:22AM

Ah so only two volumes, very interesting.

This was 10 thousand times better than Pages in Search of a Bookmark, even though we all know that she's actually dead and this is probably her last dreaming before drowning #sorrynotsorry

When you say "we all know", I say speak for your self. I'll see this as a true happy story, and you can have + keep the depressing interpretation for your self because I certainly don't want it :P

Someone please protect these precious babies from this cruel world

I'm just glad they're not dead. ^_^ I'm just going to option the movie rights and spam every studio in Hollywood until this gets made.

Put your money towards an Indie studio imo, for a short movie maybe? Big Hollywood studios often just butcher things unfortunately haha

I guess I'm the only one who, despite being happy they ended up together, am disappointed with the supernatural element of it. It's like the mangaka wanted to write a more conventional story about a yuri couple, and then copped out, because... they didn't want the girl to be a divorcee? They didn't want the couple to be so old? I dunno...

I don't think the author wanted to write a "conventional" story at all, and I also don't think the super natural element is a cop out either. The entire narrative of the story feels to be based around a "what if", what if you could go back in time and save the person you love before their abusive marriage even happened? What if you had the courage on the day of the wedding to stop it? To run away with the person you love, and never have them be in the abusive marriage for even a second? What if there was supernatural force from a supposed god that could make this wish come true?

That's why the entire narrative feels intentional to me, and doesn't feel lazy or like a cop out in my eyes. We already have several stories dealing with divorce, people moving on from their marriages and getting together with a better partner later in life, embracing their true sexuality, and those can be great. I just think this author wanted to do something different here, and at least as far as I know, a narrative like this is more uncommon. Where someone gets one chance to go back in time to stop a marriage from ever happening.

We also have a good amount of characters in Yuri that regret not being able to confess to their crush before the crush got married to a man. So that's another reason why I strongly believe the author specifically wanted to use time travel from the start, and as a central part of the story. The idea of going back in time to stop a marriage and running away with your beloved is extremely cathartic for many people for numerous reasons.

last edited at Mar 24, 2021 4:32PM

ay yo wtf is this? Also my previous comment looks blank wtf. Someone add the "wtf am i reading?" tag and the "rape" tag... but yeah...

AY YO WTF is what i kept thinking throughout the entirety of this doujin

Does this...really qualify for the rape tag...? This entire thing feels like some weird acid trip horny fever dream, about a world full of people constantly trying to fuck each other for some magic reason or another, and then everything "explodes" into basically some kind of sex orgy filled with ahegao and weird comedy shenanigans. I feel like the rape tag should typically be reserved something...less absurd? Maybe I'm wrong though.

Honestly I have no clue but chapter two especially just made me go "bbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb" also what's with touko going "yui's first time is reserved for me!" or smth lmao as if they didn't get raped/sexually harassed by both the witch and the plant girls aklsdjflsd

I'm not sure what "bbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb" means, sorry lol

Also mainly what I'm saying is that both the protags are also part of this constant sex driven rollercoaster, so it's hard to tell what rules and morals apply here. Some brief examples of this series, we have the main characters hold each other's crotches so they'll be "less exposed", one of them who boldly doesn't mind showing her lack of underwear...and it makes a dragon woman become her apprentice in the art of...masochism? Like the whole thing is just insane haha

Lmaoo basically meaning I was disgusted/uncomfortable. But yeah I get that this is a weird and wild read so maybe not the rape tag but I think the "wtf am I reading" tag is still applicable

Yeah I think the "wtf am I reading" tags definitely applies.

Another thing. Is is only menstruation blood? Cause like the witch collected it from the two girls too didn't she? And I don't think they were on their period. So I thought she collected like the blood that was shed when she took their virginity but idk

Yeah it's a little unclear there? I think it might also be blood from virginity....but they did go out of their way to ask the dragon if she's on her period. Regardless the whole thing is so absurdly dumb that I'm not going to think super hard about it lol

That fits the description too, since "blood can only be taken once from pure girls" or something like that. Yeah, this one definitely has very strong and uncomfortable rapey vibes. Change artsyle to something less moe and it would be even more apparent. It must have been done as a kind of a spoof since it's basically rape/ntr/blackmail in a dumb setting. And I guess prostitution too since the witch sold them off for the nectar. Very uncomfortable.

Moe art style series can still be extremely fucked up and grimdark while maintaining the art style. Take for example, School-Live(Gakkougurashi), the Madoka franchise and the many other series it inspired, among other things. I think it's mostly about finding the right amount of absurdity so people don't take your hentai comedy, horror comedy, black humor, too seriously and just turn off their brains. Also tone and riding a thin line, where your entire thing would fall apart and be universally panned if you mess up the absurd tone and fall off that thin line into something more realistic and miserable. Take for example Tucker & Dale VS Evil, the movie is an absurdly gorey horror comedy. It was well received and deemed hilarious by many, but if the creators dropped the ball for even a second the entire thing would just be a fucked up miserable gore-fest, and the movie would fail entirely.

I also think being uncomfortable is entirely understandable. Weird nonsense comedies with fucked up themes and elements are something that people either don't take seriously at all, or people hate them for various reasons. There's often very little middle ground for them I find. I also get it because I can't finish the "Ash VS Evil-Dead" TV series, where a lot of people think it's absurd and hilarious, but it just doesn't click with me so instead of finding it hilarious and detaching from the fucked up elements a lot of the series makes me very uncomfortable.

last edited at Mar 24, 2021 12:40PM

I'm not sure what to feel about this. It's soft porn with an excuse for rape-ish interactions between young girls.

It's a series where a character has a staff that contains floating menstruation blood. I really, really wouldn't think about it too hard lmao

So it's basically Alice in Sexland, just with yuri? It's cute enough and has this silly comedy fantasy hentai charme where you have to switch your brain off with things like dubcon.

Yeah, this being the "turn your brain off" type of entertainment is the easiest way to convey what I was trying to say. The whole thing is just utterly nonsense of the highest degree, and that's pretty much the only way to do a porn comedy I think.

I don't think I quite get what happened here? Can someone explain for the dummies in the crowd? =w=

The director knew she was hoping for an offer about a future project, to further her carrier. So he gave her advice to keep focused on her current project, but also still keep an eye out for future projects/work openings.

More than that, the director said he noticed a change in Sakuma's writing. There's a difference in the result between writing the best script you can and writing a script to show you can do something more. The first is a work of art; the second is a résumé. The first serves the audience; the second serves the author.

That makes sense, thank you for adding more!

ay yo wtf is this? Also my previous comment looks blank wtf. Someone add the "wtf am i reading?" tag and the "rape" tag... but yeah...

AY YO WTF is what i kept thinking throughout the entirety of this doujin

Does this...really qualify for the rape tag...? This entire thing feels like some weird acid trip horny fever dream, about a world full of people constantly trying to fuck each other for some magic reason or another, and then everything "explodes" into basically some kind of sex orgy filled with ahegao and weird comedy shenanigans. I feel like the rape tag should typically be reserved something...less absurd? Maybe I'm wrong though.

Honestly I have no clue but chapter two especially just made me go "bbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb" also what's with touko going "yui's first time is reserved for me!" or smth lmao as if they didn't get raped/sexually harassed by both the witch and the plant girls aklsdjflsd

I'm not sure what "bbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb" means, sorry lol

Also mainly what I'm saying is that both the protags are also part of this constant sex driven rollercoaster, so it's hard to tell what rules and morals apply here. Some brief examples of this series, we have the main characters hold each other's crotches so they'll be "less exposed", one of them who boldly doesn't mind showing her lack of underwear...and it makes a dragon woman become her apprentice in the art of...masochism? Like the whole thing is just insane haha

ay yo wtf is this? Also my previous comment looks blank wtf. Someone add the "wtf am i reading?" tag and the "rape" tag... but yeah...

AY YO WTF is what i kept thinking throughout the entirety of this doujin

Does this...really qualify for the rape tag...? This entire thing feels like some weird acid trip horny fever dream, about a world full of people constantly trying to fuck each other for some magic reason or another, and then everything "explodes" into basically some kind of sex orgy filled with ahegao and weird comedy shenanigans. I feel like the rape tag should typically be reserved something...less absurd? Maybe I'm wrong though.

I don't think I quite get what happened here? Can someone explain for the dummies in the crowd? =w=

The director knew she was hoping for an offer about a future project, to further her carrier. So he gave her advice to keep focused on her current project, but also still keep an eye out for future projects/work openings.

...because his farts were really loud? Well alrighty then.

I can't believe we've been left on a cliffhanger lmao

Thanks for translating this! It was weird, but entertaining. Your hard work is greatly appreciated <3

^I think your imagination takes you to some wild places lmao

To me Lumine is just checking Walnut's lips to figure out the best way to kiss her.

Holy hell I just realized these are like 100% the same ladies as I Could Just Tell. Glad others caught on too, dunno how I missed that.

I think they just have similar designs, but there are a couple differences between the character designs. Plus since it's the same creator for both one-shots, their art style also gives a familiar feeling between both stories.

That aside, I also really don't want to think about one of these wholesome moms dying lol

last edited at Mar 23, 2021 3:53PM

poor kid... she's adopted

Why poor kid? She has two great loving moms, and a super cute girlfriend that also loves her. She's clearly happy with her life.

last edited at Mar 23, 2021 1:11PM

^lol I know you're joking around, so I don't know what else I can say. "Work smarter not harder" is a saying I prefer I guess haha

last edited at Mar 23, 2021 12:59PM

^Amen

^Well that's just rude lol, Walnut and Lumine are both best girls.