This was sweet and all but I'm pretty tired of stories that end as soon as they get together. Like that's not the end of their story it's the start of the most interesting part.

Wait, so if her confidence is only on the inside, does that mean she was actually making that goofy face? Oh well, Happy Halloween everyone!

Im thinking either it was translated wrong (not likely) or the original is worded wrong because saying an inner succubus who is only strong inside makes no sense.

firstly is she in inner succubus? I thought it established her imagine from the pink her was just what people think, and something she uses as a cover too. 2nd, it shows here she isnt acting AT ALL like a succubus internally - she is being really shy and embarrassed.

It seems like ch6 page 3 panel 2 should say something like, she is outwardly like a succubus, but inside she isnt bold at all surely? either that or i've misunderstood what its trying to say.

Pretty sure the "inner succubus" thing is referring to her desire to be forward and seductive like in the fantasy she had on that page and the "inwardly bold" part is referring to her inability to do more than fantasize about actually doing so. Her being shy and embarrassed is pretty clear externally.

This is so good

Headpats are too erotic

Well, it's "someone who gets lonely easily", but phrase "easily lonely" like "easily depressed" doesn't sound natural in english and phrasing it in a way that sounds good is hard, so hence I agree with your dilemma. "Unicorn and Girl Who Gets Lonely Easily" doesn't really roll off the tongue.

And Sabishigariya Girl does?

Booo,so lesbian sex keeps women virgins? boooo ,other than that,I am liking this weird thing.

Eh, it means they can do the do without breaking the contract which is a better reason to adhere to heteronormative purity culture nonsense than any of the other ones I've come across.

Inviting that competition

none of these fools are competition

Okay this is pretty damn great even if it's also weird as hell. Grey blushing contrasted with pink hair is definitely jarring though.

Haruka is extremely powerful and quickly becoming a fave.

And hey, who else was a bit afraid that the senpai was going to end in the "harem" too ?

I hope she does that would be hilarious. Honestly, at this point if this just ends up being a harem comedy where the ultra dense protagonist is a 30something women I'd be down with that.

HAHAHAHAHA OH MY GOD!!! THIS WAS GREAT Like, there's a very special reason why is this so great (also spoilers for 1 x ½ ) They did in one chapter what 1 x ½ took like 3 or 4 months to do ! omg and at first I was getting flashbacks like OH NOOOOO NOT THIS SHIT AGAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIINNNN but this time she came out of nowhere, we saw the flashbacks, we knew she was a player, they were about to do it but didn't and then at the very end she makes a bold statement that makes Akemi doubt about her own feelings (just like the slut from 1x tried to do with Asuka's mom)

The only difference is that Shion didn't know Akemi back then... But the rest is almost too similar, would it be a stretch to say that there was a heavy influence? anyway I laughed pretty hard because of this.

I doubt there's any influence, it's a pretty standard romance trope. This old flame is certainly a lot more likable and a lot less skeevy though.

To everyone that didn't like the first chapter... What, do you all hate fun? I mean, I know as well as you that this is no place for the stuff, but to be so turned away from it when it finally appears...

I love where this story is going, but the fun has definitely simmered.

I'm not opposed to madcap pacing (it's one of my favourite parts of Tadokoro-san) but madcap pacing combined with an attempt at complex or nuanced narrative or characters is a recipe for a jumbled mess. Fast pacing works with simple characters and stories that can be quickly established with little explanation. Tadokoro-san did a better job of establishing its premise and characters in 4 pages than this did in 40.

Definitely better than the first chapter but I still don't particularly like or care about these characters.

Yes good I love it.

^It's drawn from a few scenes where she's pretty clearly a disaster gay about Byleth though it's not as extreme as fan artists tend to portray it.

Yeah love triangles are a pain it's been several chapters now where nothing happens at all.

Exactly, most of the time they're just a stalling tactic that ultimately contributes nothing interesting and just leaves us with either a sad sympathetic side character or a vanquished mildly annoying villain.

I'm so tired of love triangles it's so rare that anyone does anything actually interesting with them.

I'm not of the "instant gratification" crowd. There's no point to anything if there's no proper build up. Insta love sucks, insta power sucks, insta tragedy rarely works ... take your time and establish what the heck is going on. It's basic storytelling.

Pretty sure basic storytelling also involves not adding unneccessary information. We have an office lady forcing herself to fit into society, cooky freelancer who's in love with her being all "fuck that", and boom, you have the setup for the series to come, which is the pair developing their post-confession relationship while also dealing with the consequences of their impulsive decisions. It doesn't need any more exposition than that.

Series is ongoing on Yuri-Hime Pixiv with five chapters to date, btw.

This reads like a rough initial bullet point list of plot points that aren't actually adequately connected to each other and instead are just rattled off one after the other with as little detail as possible to try to set up the end drama within the page limit. I have no emotional investment in these characters because the author made no effort to establish them as characters so the ending just falls flat and I'm left with nothing more than a feeling of "Okay?"

Neither of these characters are terribly interesting or likable and this is really paced like a oneshot.

Kinda agree. I like her stealing her at the alter - but I dont like either of their personalities.

I will have to check out a few more chapters first I guess.

My hope is that the author just really wanted to get to the runaway bride scene ASAP and subsequent chapters are actually going to have like reasonable pacing and more thorough development of what the hell is even happening.

Neither of these characters are terribly interesting or likable and this is really paced like a oneshot.

Nononon must be protected.

God damn Haruka go get it girl!

majere posted:

Kase is a tomboy.

It's clearly mimicking a het relatioship.

Dropped.

/s

You kid but it does feel like this story leans hard into the "but who's the guy" mentality people often apply to sapphic relationships.

Even lesbians have integrated these roles. Butch/Femme, Neko/Tachi, Breadwinner/Housewife whatever...

Some other lesbians hate this kind of dynamics, because it's associated with the oppression of the patriarchy. But it doesn't make it invalid. It's an association fallacy.

It's okay for two women in a relationship to have one who takes charge and one who's pampered. As long as they are comfortable and happy with it, why is it bothering you?

Well first thing, butch and femme do not denote what heteronormative gender role a person fulfills in their relationships that's exactly the kind of misconception I'm talking about. Butches aren't play acting as men. Secondly, Yamada never actually agreed to this dynamic Kase just appointed herself the protector without any actual discussion of the subject. Heck she actively pushed back against it only for Kase to ignore her.

You know that nothing good will come by provoking . The conversation need to stop because there no point to continue it.

I'm no BugDevil, I know when to hold em' and fold em'. Wait...did I just engage in provocation??

On a serious note, why aren't they having more sex?? Kase acts out the way she does mostly because she's sexually frustrated, or at least that's how it's played. She'd be a lot more tame if she were getting some on a regular basis. At one point, I half expected in this chapter for Kase to take Yamada in ally somewhere. More proof that Hiromi does not know how young adults actually work, which is weird, considering how I presume that she was one at one point? Further evidenced by the fact that Yamada still gets really anxious when Kase even attempts to touch her. I thought we were passed this, but clearly we aren't if ole' girl can't even put a band-aid on Yamada without her having a heart attack. Where is the love...or rather, the sex?? I need it and Kase DAMN sure needs it at this point.

It feels like it's part of the general "Yamada is functionally a child" thing Hiromi has going on.

Kase is a tomboy.

It's clearly mimicking a het relatioship.

Dropped.

/s

You kid but it does feel like this story leans hard into the "but who's the guy" mentality people often apply to sapphic relationships.