I actually agree with the person above me. The first two chapters seemed like the start of something longer and it was surprising that everything was crammed into a third chapter. Hell, a fourth chapter would have probably helped flesh it out further.
Lots of cringe-y things here, but I'm not surprised when it comes to this author. I think they still have a long way to go when it comes to storytelling and I'm really hoping we can get some well-written angst from them soon. Good luck, Kodama!