"I love you, girl I met 14 seconds ago!"
14 seconds later
"Oh no, she is gone, how poignant our love was"
In all seriousness, I think the reason this doesn't work is that it seems to throw two girls together, they fall deeply in love instantly, fall asleep without a single additional line, and then have one girl immediately forget that girl to fall deeply in love with the next girl the instant she wakes up.
It was my impression that this was the nature of the curse. The narration boxes on page 16, to me, seem to be the compulsion, or even description, of a curse. On the other hand, the first girl is powerless to stop the curse and somewhat apathetic as she delivers her lines about how it is what they both wish. Her love, much like the second girl when she realizes the third girl is already snared by the curse, is insincere or pitying.
Ah, and on page 20 the second girl says just that. It was the curse that set her heart aflutter, she says.
Though, if you didn't want to give the first woman a hug after she told that story, you may be lacking empathy.
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