@Arujin Firstly, stories can be about many things at once- secondly sometimes authors dont have a clue what their story is 'about' - message wise, and just make stuff up as they go along a general theme - such as 'ecchi schoolgirl yuri.
And sometimes I guess they do have a plan, and may execute it well- or badly.
In this case, I kinda think its no 2 - they made it up as they went, fluctuating each chapter as the mood took them.
But just to say, thats not neccisarily bad- and a story does not NEED to stick to one 'thing' its trying to be or say.
What you're explaining here wouldn't be bad writing if that fluctuation didn't result in your characters being retroactively less likable and seemingly hypocritical. You can write a story as you go, but you should settle on it's tone. There might be no "message" in the manga as a whole, but there is clearly one in this chapter, and quite hamfisted too. Point is, constantly switching back and forth lowers the overall quality of the story and the writing, because now we don't know when to ignore something rape-y like the 1st few chapters because it's just an "ecchi schoolgirl yuri", or take it seriously because it actually wants to talk about societal views on lesbians. The entire narrative tone is in a limbo and changes whenever the author feels like it, leaving the reader confused.
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