There are definitely some of issues with the art style aside from just bland BG & chara designs, such as stiff gestures and poses along with some perspective issues (like in the first panel of page 60). The biggest problem is probably how the faces and bodies don't match up quite nicely. The faces are pleasantly drawn while the bodies just look awkward sometimes because of the stiff poses. It's amateurish and basic, sure, but it's serviceable & tbh, this is a problem with a lot of mangaka & especially yuri mangaka in general, so I don't see what's the fuss about :/
Story-wise, yeah, it's choppy and mediocre so far. But ah well, still serviceable.