I'm choosing to be cautiously optimistic with this one and hope that more time and care is spent into actually developing the two main characters in later chapters...because...yeah. I won't go so far as to say I thought it was BAD, but that first chapter definitely felt incredibly rushed and generally all over the place.
Can't say I hated it, but I definitely would have if this had just been a random oneshot. So here's hoping the rest of the chapters make up for how janky this first one felt.