Good story, nice art. Although the eyes sometimes look like they're filled with despair.
Also page 19 seems to be missing some text on the first panel I think. unless it's suppose to be like that.
Apologies. It was like 4am when I put this out and I didn't really bother to check everything thoroughly.
Putting out a fixed version now. Hopefully it shouldn't take too long to update on Dynasty.
edit: there's also a slight grammar error on pg7 too. Hopefully that'll be updated soon too.
last edited at Nov 4, 2014 7:00AM