It's like the author wanted to make a happy smutty story all along

Judging from Gyuunyuu Linda's past content, I would say that's very likely. This might've been her first foray into a longer type of format, and leaning on drama to stretch things out is hardly an uncommon practice.

Anyway, nice that it ended the way that it did - very much in the way I would've expected from GL - although it certainly does feel abrupt. This could definitely use a sequel or afterstory.

Thank you again for your efforts on this, ZdY.

A little rough around the edges,but still a fairly good porn with plot.

it's just me, or it's too fast?

hilarious, everyone going on about rape and Misaki didn't give two shits about it.
what happens to the abusive dad? she gets over him with the power of LOVE!

In the epilogue, they go to family services and the father gets imprisoned. The older sister is hit by a bus. Jun's existence is punishment enough for her crimes. Happily ever after.

This was a total mess, the tone from chapter to chapter was completely off.

Syrupy Love is still a syrupy love.

I would have thought the whole broken family thing they brought up would have been resolved, but I guess not.

"Mama thing"? Is that a reference to a line in a previous chapter I'm forgetting?

Somehow, this reminds me of Kuttsukiboshi. Can't put my finger on exactly why, but it just does. Better ending than I expected, though. Here's hoping her next work will stick to a lighter mood. Though I still miss her older art style, it had classic yuri charm whereas this looks sort of like something a straight dude would draw for a Hyperdimension Neptunia doujin.

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YAY happy. Finally its been about two months since last time they where

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That girl is a saint. I've never seen a broken girl fixed so fast.

That girl is a saint. I've never seen a broken girl fixed so fast.

I guess this what they would call an esoteric happy ending, right?

I finished reading this a few days ago but felt compelled to come back and read the comments. I think I overall liked this? I probably just have a thing for broken characters getting fixed by healing ones.
This has good bones, though, the story's different. It really would have benefited from being like an extra volume long, to flesh everything out and make it more cohesive. Sex between Tsubasa and Misaki happened too quickly, general pacing was off, flashback (although needed) was introduced poorly, Tsubasa's father and sister needed to be actual characters.

About time they got a happy ending!

tsubasa's dad and jun should be in prison

Wow. That's a better turn of events.

At least I wanted to see Jun behind the bars tho:/ But she got isekaied by truck kun to somewhere where she was found by many goblins and ya know what happened:^)

this actually turned better than expected
however there is a lack of cohesions in dialogues or at least in its design sometimes